My First Writing Assignment

Good morning everyone - I figured I'd share a copy of my first draft of my first assignment. This is the one where we had to write about how the contents of our wallet's either described us accurately or inaccurately.

Let me know what you think...

The contents of a person's wallet speak volumes, although in some cases, these things can be very misleading. Based solely on the items found in the innards of my black leather bound wallet is the identity of a person who no longer exists. The opinions and thoughts formed by a stranger, in this case, would be wrong.
My wallet contains very few items, a license, insurance card and debit card. My license picture shows a woman who is 200 pounds heavier than I am now and unhappy with the person she is. My wallet tells people that I am a loner as I have no personal pictures of my friends, family or boyfriend. Looking solely at what my wallet holds shows little about the person I am, rather, is speaks bounds about the person I once was. Someone who has never met me before would be missing out if they never had the opportunity to see the person I have now become.
The new me is not reflected in the contents of my wallet. If this stranger dug deeper they would see that I am a loving and caring person with many friends and a wonderful family. I have a new face, body, personality and life now. I am a hard worker with lots of drive, motivation and determination. I have a passion for life, learning and experiencing different and new things, all of which cannot be learned by looking through my wallet. I am proud of the person I am now, not of the person my wallet holds.
A wallet shaped by body image is what I had and will have. 200 pounds heavier makes your whole life change from the way you hold your head to the items you hold in your wallet.

Nice Job Laura!  I particularly like the way you ended it, and how you tied everything together.  Are you enjoying the class?

Thanks Cara - I was hoping you would read it! I definitely like the class and I'm enjoying being back in school - it's nice to have something all to myself!!!

I have class tonight - I'm excited to see if my professor liked it.

~Laura

I'm SO glad you are enjoying school!  I LUV to go, and can't for the life of me understand why my son doesn't luv it too.  What's not to love!?  I am so anal when it comes to school too.  My husband teases me that if I get an A, I am upset I didn't get an A+...hahahaha!!  He's right!!

Yes, you do have it all to yourself, and you are doing something to improve your life in the long run.  It's so nice that you can do it now, while you are still young.  It will help boost your career, for SURE!  Good luck with your classes (tho I'm sure you don't need any of that!)  I'm so happy that that you are enjoying it and getting into it.

Great job, Laura!  I can relate to that wallet.  Everything in it is plastic.  Nothing real.  A very sad face looking back at me on a one year old license picture.  No other pics.  None of my hubby, my children, my grandson.  Very sad.........  I think I better remedy that!

Good luck with school!!

Laura - what a beautiful, poignant peice.  I read this with tears in my eyes as it brought out so many emotions to me... for you, for me, for all the others who have experienced what we have all gone through to become what and who we want to be.
God Bless,
Pam

Great job Lovely Laura!

Reading this touched my heart. So many reminders of 'yesterday'. Although I have great friends and a fantastic extended family, I was so alone. It was so much more comfortable there.

I've only known you since February but you have changed so much just in the past six months! You're out of the 200 lb cocoon and have become a beautiful, colorful, free butterfly!

You have a great way with words. Anyone who has not had the opportunity to meet you is truly missing out on a lot. You have lightened my life so much!

God Bless you!

Jules

That was very well written and beautiful!!  I'm sure your professor